Revise and edit the argumentative research essay you wrote in Lesson 2, based on feedback from your peers and from your instructor. Your revised essay should show that you paid special attention to the feedback you’ve received and that you’ve made a major effort to improve the assignment. Your essay should also be as free as possible of sentence-level issues such as typos and confusing wording.
Your assignment should include the following elements:
– A claim, supporting reasons, and evidence from at least five sources
– An introduction paragraph, body paragraphs, and a conclusion paragraph
– A counterclaim, followed by a response that supports your argument
– Transitions to show how the claim, reasons, evidence, and counterclaim are related
– Feedback from your peers and your rough draft from Lesson 2
Ask yourself these questions as you revise:
Did I correct any problems that my instructor pointed out in my Lesson 2 assignment, especially problems related to my claim, reasons, or evidence?
Did I implement feedback from my peers?
Did I remember to attach my peer feedback and Lesson 2 draft so that my instructor can compare them to my revised draft?
See below feedback from instructor. Instead of feedback from my peer please use attached evaluation sheet to address possible revision points.
Thank you for sharing your work.
argumentative research essay based on the outline you created in Lesson
1. Although you’re free to find new sources and make changes to your
original plan, all the original requirements from Lesson 1 remain,
including a strong claim, evidence from credible sources, and supporting
reasons that back up the claim.
Things you did well:
* Creating a clear claim and is arguable and defensible
* Using evidence from at least five credible sources
* Wrapping up your essay and leaving the reader with a strong impression
Areas of growth:
* Consider replacing “colleagues” with peers; colleagues makes it seem as if the children have jobs.
* Your Work: The fact that these kids rarely have time to chat,
converse, and establish social relationships with their colleagues or
parents makes them lack socialization attribute.
The fact that these kids rarely have time to chat, converse, and
establish social relationships with their peers or parents makes them
lack socialization attribute.